### Single Paragraph Rubric Evaluation
| Criteria | Score | Comments |
|----------|-------|----------|
| Topic Sentence | 10/20 | Topic sentence is unclear and not correctly placed at the beginning of the paragraph. It is somewhat rephrased in the closing sentence. |
| Supporting Sentences | 15/20 | The paragraph has three main supporting ideas related to the topic, but they could be more clearly articulated. |
| Organization | 15/20 | The details are in a logical order, but the transitions between ideas could be smoother to keep the reader more engaged. |
| Mechanics and Grammar | 5/20 | There are numerous punctuation, capitalization, and spelling errors throughout the paragraph. |
**Total Score: 45/80**
### Paragraph with Errors Underlined
Education is a developing process. From past to present it <u>continually</u> changed.I think that , being <u>well educated</u> person is now much easier than in the past.
Firstly, the purpose of education was religious. Thus , it made education limited. But today people have many options. They can improve themselves individually and also socially.
Secondly, there was no technology in the past. So people had to make more effort both physically and mentally. Now, technology is almost everywhere. Such devices as <u>internet</u> and computers are the main items of education. Therefore , people can access a lot more topics.
Lastly, because of the limited options, <u>teacher's</u> technique based on memorization. Today , we cannot support this idea. Because with the technology , different types of methods <u>arised</u>. It can be <u>examplified</u> by digital devices and remote learning.
To <u>sump</u> up, education has undergone some <u>tranformations</u>.The aim, technology and <u>leraning</u> techniques has huge impact on it. These changes are to raise better educated people.
### Feedback and Corrections
1. The topic sentence should be at the beginning of the paragraph and clearly state the main idea.
2. There are several spelling errors:
- "continually" should be "continually"
- "internet" should be capitalized as "Internet"
- "arised" should be "arose"
- "examplified" should be "exemplified"
- "sump" should be "sum"
- "tranformations" should be "transformations"
- "leraning" should be "learning"
3. Grammar issues:
- "well educated" should be hyphenated: "well-educated"
- "teacher's technique" should be "teachers' techniques" (plural possessive)
- "has huge impact" should be "have a huge impact" (plural subject)
4. Punctuation errors:
- Inconsistent use of spaces before and after commas
- Missing comma after "Firstly" and "Secondly"
- Unnecessary comma before "being"
5. The paragraph could benefit from more specific examples and clearer transitions between ideas.
6. The conclusion could more effectively summarize the main points and restate the topic sentence.
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